Peer Review

Peer Review

1 .The introduction in this essay is clear. It is describing important details about the problem (the difference about the food today and a hundred years ago) .The first sentence is attention-getting.

2. The thesis statement-“I believe that the food a hundred years ago was much healthier than the food that we can buy in a grocery store or in a restaurant currently. Probably, my great grandparents did not know much about the vitamins and nutrients contained in the food they were eating every day but their diet was healthier because they did not use any dangerous pesticides to grow their food or antibiotics to feed their animals”.

3. This paper needs more details and explanations about the chemicals that some food contains like for example oatmeal. This essay should have more sources about antibiotics that many farmers are using to grow their animals and how dangerous they are for our population. Moreover, that paper has to state clearly “why they did not use any chemicals or pesticides in 1911”maybe they did not exist at that time.

4. This essay has some grammar mistakes.

5. The author did not identify all her sources in this essay. A lot of chemicals it is appearing in this paper but not enough explanations where they are coming from. This essay needs also references at the end of the essay.

6. This essay is clear. The ideas are interesting.